SONGWRITERS HELP! FOR GIRL DYING OF CANCER. WRITING A SONG
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Hello, and thank you for who ever is reading this.. I'm trying to write a song for a girl I fell in love with when I travelled to another country. We've fallen in love and I've wanted nothing more than to keep in contact with her, which we have, but she's had some uncertain reason for me not to get too attached.. She's beautiful, as well as a beautiful writer for an independent film organization. She's been sending me scripts and writings for weeks now all with a similar beautiful yet dreary subtext, and last night I finally realized that's why she doesn't want me to get closer, because she is in fact dying of cancer. I felt like throwing up, I couldn't get a grip on this unchangeable situation. What a cruel fate this was to have something so beautiful happen in such unlikely circumstances.. only to never have a chance at something more. Tears did not change the situation, but I remembered our love for the Beatles was our first common interest, so I've decided to write a song. I'd be truly grateful for any help anyone is willing to offer. I play a little bit of guitar and I sing, and write, but I'm not experienced at all. Sir Paul and the band are the reason I picked up a guitar to begin with, which is why this was the first place I thought of when looking for some help with this. I've written down a bunch of concepts and ideas I would like to include. The theme is basically that time goes on, but this was our unique and beautiful moment in time. My life is more beautiful because of it, and with whatever happens, that will never change. But i dont want to include anything about an end, final, parting, death etc. Generally, happy it happend over the fact that its ending. What I need help with: 1) Coming up with physical metaphores of the situation, (EXAMPLE. Candle in the wind, etc.) Some sort of visual that represents a beautiful fleeting moment, something painful but beautiful, almost like a daydream, you wake up and its with you forever and your're different because of it. 2) Ideas of bars, counts etc. per vers/chorus, something that wouldnt be to complex to add guitar to. EXAMPLE. How many bars are a good for a verse, chorus, verse, chorus, bridge, extended chorus. Ideally I'd like a 3rd verse after the brigde, but if not that's probably okay. Here is what I have so far from last night, ideas to be made into lyrics like a story: -We met, who knew we'd fall in love -this moment is ours, perfect, beautiful, frozen in time, our drop in the sea of life, -our drop is gone, taken by the wave/current, but still flows on forever. -something sad -redeeming happiness because this moment in time we shared was ours alone, just yours and mine. -if the candle is out, your light/spark will always brighten my nights -forever burns in my soul, our beautiful moment in time, just urs and mine -Wherever you are.. call for me/ call my name, i promise ill find you, when you need me, through the darkness ill find you, -and I'll hold you tight like i did our very first night, feel your body on me, breath you deeply, kiss my lips so sweetly, it was meant to be, we both knew those lips were meant for me. -We danced, we kissed -Put all your fears all your worries, on me, ill protect you from the rain, (something about pain, or possibly not) (sad/hard) the thought is sometimes too much for my heart to take (reword, not as straight forward) >some days my heart wants to dry out/ fall apart, -you breathe new life into my loneliest hours, -wherever you are, smile because I'm with you with my lips ready to kiss you. -(possibly) meeting you set my soul free, it moved me, changed me from who I thought I had to be -in/through the darkness you found my heart, -we could look in our eyes and be frozen in time, -when we walked through the night, you made me strong and brave, -where there's hopes and love is where, is where you'll always find me (or where i'll always find you, or something) -if its too dark to see just call for me, i'll carry you, just trust in me, our love will guide us through. -i kiss you, again and again, for my whole life -some words are hard to say/ -Wherever you are now, dream of me, and ill dream of you too. I promise I'll find you, to see you again, hold you and kiss you again, my lover, my friend. That's all I could muster. Again.. any help is really appreciated. Thanks for your time, if you've read this. Christian
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Man, I'm sorry. That sounds like a terrible and tragic situation. What can I say? Not much to say really which may be why no one replied yet. But you're also obviously well on the way to writing a song from all that stuff you wrote, and I suspect having written that will help and that it may even be more or less written in your head by now. I doubt other songwriters will be much help to you, certainly not an amateur one like me. Having said that, I'd say: make sure this is a song from the heart, and avoid cliches. If it's heartfelt and real then it should evolve by itself, so don't worry about technicalities like tempo and structure until the end. Let the song come to life in your head, then once you've got some lyrics and a basic melody, anything that you're unsure of you could maybe get a musician friend to help you with. Hope that helps, and also that you'll have happier things to write songs about before long.
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I am sorry and I will try to help you in any way I possibly can. from what I know about song writing and melody, the easiest way to write something is to play around with a key ( eg E major, D minor) and some chords. when you find something you like, try to see where the lyrics would fit in and make up some lyrics on the spot. this may seem like a complete waste of time but I can tell you now, its a great way to work. I sadly don't have enough time on my hands at the moment to analyse or make some metaphors but I promise I will try and make some and place them here when possible.
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I feel somewhat shy about this now. But, I do appreciate your help. Thank you.
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You've put enough thought into it already to easily yield a song, you have a lot of good ideas there in what you wrote. Personally I'd just use what you have, decide on the meter and make it work, you really don't need anyone's help. I often find just writing the ideas down is the best way to start. sometimes they'll just form a structure without even having to try. I can see that happening with what you wrote. there are some similarities in the different parts you have, I can see some structure forming there. well done Wish you well!
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But see, even that information helps. its hard to tell sometimes, after you've looked at something for a while that you've written.