Ah, yes. One of my earliest clues was for that one:
illwobble:
...although I'm shocked to discover I didn't even join this thread till almost page 50. Those first 40 pages were classic. Who can forget gems like this:
Darth_McCartney:
Ah, yes. One of my earliest clues was for that one:
illwobble:
...although I'm shocked to discover I didn't even join this thread till almost page 50. Those first 40 pages were classic. Who can forget gems like this:
Darth_McCartney:
Rainclouds and I'll Give You A Ring I agree are brilliant. How about these other B-sides: -I Want You To Fly (2005)
-Growing Up, Falling Down (2005) -I Lie Around (1973) -Check My Machine (1980) Plus a few album tracks I like a lot: -That Would Be Something (1970) -When The Night (1973) -She's My Baby (1976) -The Pound Is Sinking (1980) -Distractions (1989) and... -Bip Bop (1971)Very nice KPU! Hope you had lots of fun! You've even gone to the trouble of posting all that stuff there and colouring in the little monster picture!! Feel free to talk about me and my works on here in the 3rd person - I'm greatly honoured! I'm not sure about melodies - I think the main thing that helps me write good melodies funnily enough is not using an instrument. Writing a song in your head means you start with the melody and you don't get stuck in the rut of the same old keys and chord progressions and patterns all the time. Do you ever write tunes in your head?
kapoo:
illwobble:
kapoo:
I like what you did there, very group thinking it might appear to me on the arrangement? and just execution of the moves as a band, whose part does what. Non-Stick Penguins in the house!! I guess is what's happening way to lay down the tracks. you wrote some nice verses in there, well played sir Hey can you post the guitar chords here sometime?
Thanks! Yeah we do very well for almost no rehearsal time! Here are the chords, but although maybe I'll email you them too as you can't see them line up on here. That passing Ebdim chord (Eb/F#/A) is a tricky one there, just on that SEE ME dead bit!.
Thanks! would you mind if I record a track over the top of you guys', adding another guitar and perhaps some vocal? I think this weekend I'll be able to get it done. I had a guitar rhythm idea!
COOL!! That would be great. Shame the performances on the track aren't a bit tighter, but go for it! Can't wait to hear what you've dreamt up!
kapoo:
I like what you did there, very group thinking it might appear to me on the arrangement? and just execution of the moves as a band, whose part does what. Non-Stick Penguins in the house!! I guess is what's happening way to lay down the tracks. you wrote some nice verses in there, well played sir Hey can you post the guitar chords here sometime?
Thanks! Yeah we do very well for almost no rehearsal time! Here are the chords, but although maybe I'll email you them too as you can't see them line up on here. That passing Ebdim chord (Eb/F#/A) is a tricky one there, just on that SEE ME dead bit! BFHM Long chorus: E A7 D7 A7 The other day I saw a big fat hairy monster D7 A7 With a big fat scary head And now I'm scared D7 A7 Ebdim E That that mean old monster wants to see me dead A7 D7 A7 The other day I saw a big fat scary monster D7 A7 With big fat hairy legs And now I'm scared D7 A7 Ebdim E That that mean old monster wants to see me dead A7 D7 A7 1) Stay inside all day. No, I don't want to go out. I'm not going out today. D7 F#m There's people out there who've got guns and knives. We need to guard our lives. E D Bm D I saw the papers yesterday. Something about some psycho killer dragging little kids E away.
Rough demo of new bluesy song:
I wrote the chorus several months ago and some may have already herd that. This is finished now, performed with guitar and ukelele. Big Fat Hairy Monster The other day I saw a big fat hairy monster With a big fat scary head And now I'm scared That that mean old monster wants to see me dead The other day I saw a big fat scary monster With big fat hairy legs And now I'm scared That that mean old monster wants to see me dead Stay inside all day. No, I don't want to go out. I'm not going out today. There's people out there who've got guns and knives. We need to guard our lives. I saw the papers yesterday. Something about some psycho killer dragging little kids away. The other day I saw a big fat scary monster With a big fat hairy head And now I'm scared That that mean old monster wants to see me dead Keep looking around, and keep those ears pricked for the least suspicious sound There's people out there who might beat me, rob me, defraud me or eat me! I watched the news the other day. Looks like the whole world's full of terrorists trying to blow us all away. A lot of things I could do, but I might fail or just not be able to. There's people out there who'd do better than me. Plus way too much bureaucracy. I heard a bunch of people say 'bout how the government's trying to take all of our hard-earned rights away.jezebeljack:
illwobble:
Actually that reminds me, here's one song I wrote which could do with a better (completely new) set of lyrics if you're inspired at all!
Since you said you're more into writing lyrics than melody. I quite like the tune to this but the lyrics are a bit odd. Likewise I also have another song with a decent tune and REALLY BAD LYRICS if you're interested in that!send me the song or put it up on soundcloud if you want or send me the link via pm or facebook. i'm sorry i have not been on lately, but i was busy having a family of two little and one big boy, all of them very lively. i'll see what i come up with. i listened to your grasshopper and i quite like it, but i haven't had the time to think of something. should it still be about grasshoppers? i had a dream a while back, don't really remember what it was about .... but when i woke up i had those things in my head and had to write them down. i know they are a bit cheesy, really, but i thought it was amazing to wake up and have a rhyming poem in my head. of course i don't own the last part of this text. "brother i have seen the light and the light was mighty bright i wish i hadn't seen it though there's so much i don't want to know i can't forget about it now i have learned so much about how the world keeps turning without end and people just don't understand. the storm is coming can't you see. just have another cup of tea. preferrably with me. living is easy with eyes closed misunderstanding all you see. i think i know i mean a yes but it's all wrong that is i think i disagree. it doesn't matter much to me." see you (or hear you) soon. btw, i'm learning the guitar now, and i really suck at hey jude and let it be. maybe let it be is not the right message for starting something new, haha the next project will be too much rain, once i mastered bm.
Hi! Sorry I missed this. I likewise haven't been on the board so much lately and have small children who take up a lot of time. Those are some really nice lyrics (last part oddly familiar ) . I WAS thinking about entirely new lyrics for grasshopper but then I'm strangely attached to it as well. Did it live for the first time tonight actually, complete with egg whisk and stick to make a grasshopper chirpy noise!! I too wish I'd learned guitar long ago. Not sure I have the time or patience now. Take care!
kapoo:
Hey what is up Jon! Man you are a really good songwriter, very clever. I think Lorraine is great, I like the way your lines flow and sort of (ill)wobble off kilter a little bit, great style man, and also very clever rhyming you do. That's one of your better songs I'd say. Props to Magnus for his bassline, really fits the style you do the song in. As for Surrender, also a well written song, beautiful in it's way. Because I sort of know your writing process, you coming up with the lyrics and the melody, sort of Jim Morrison style, and like the Doors did, you guy are really able to select the right chords to fit the melodies to fit and support you come up with. Thats really impressive to me, and I'd say you are getting better and better at doing that. you nail all the right chords IMO. nice job man, thanks for posting them bro
What can I say? Thanks again for listening. I'm really happy with the way these turned out - especially Lorraine. Looking forward to trying that one out live some time. Having a bass in there really opens things up and gives a much better sound, especially with these two since they're based around those basslines really. Working out all the individual chords and the bassline was the most satisfying part of writing Lorraine (not that I'm in any way trying to claim back the credit you gave Magnus Magnus, who deserves all props available always - he's a great musician). As for the rhyming - clever? Lorraine - the rain - again - insane.... if you say so!!
Finally, I have new songs for you! Two of them! These both have proper basslines for the first time on my recordings. Bringing my friend Rob to play guitar meant Magnus could play his bass ukelele. 1) Lorraine:
This is a silly bluesy type song I quite enjoyed putting together. Lyrics: Lorraine I saw you dancing in the rain Well, the rain it was a-pouring There was really no ignoring You dancing in the rain Lorraine You were just dancing in the rain Dancing so joyfully and freely No, I wasn't being leery I just saw you as I waited in the rain Lorraine I never saw you there again Although I often would go back there Hoping to recapture That magical moment again Lorraine You were spinning and dancing in the rain Oh, you looked so cool and carefree You prob'ly didn't see me As you danced there in the soft warm summer rain Dance with me in the rain Never mind those raindrops Come and dance with me there till the rain stops (x2) [pause] Lorraine You got me dancing in the rain At first I felt a little stupid Prob'ly looked nothing like you did As I danced there in the driving autumn rain Lorraine Now people think I've gone insane And although perhaps it won't concern ya I caught hypothermia As I danced there in the cold hard winter rain Lorraine I saw you dancing in the rain Well, the rain it was a-pouring There was really no ignoring You dancing in the rainoobu24:
ice cream on a hill...fool on a hill
Yup. A rhubarb fool to be exact.
me2:
blue jay hey:
sick and tired of it ?
Not at all! All great guesses It is on the right track. Great idea. Now the first one: sick and tired of what kind of disease?
I don't remember a song called "Jaundice It" Only title I can think of is Get It but can't make sense of that...
Not DISTRACTIONS is it? No, probably not...
me2:
illwobble:
You Tell Me? (ute elm e)
Very well done. Yes, that one was a little trickier, with the Aussie slang there (ute), but they can't all be easy eh?
No, especially as Freedom is such a rubbish throwaway song that could easily have been written by HM or someone else with only a fraction of Macca's talent.
Man, I'm sorry. That sounds like a terrible and tragic situation. What can I say? Not much to say really which may be why no one replied yet. But you're also obviously well on the way to writing a song from all that stuff you wrote, and I suspect having written that will help and that it may even be more or less written in your head by now. I doubt other songwriters will be much help to you, certainly not an amateur one like me. Having said that, I'd say: make sure this is a song from the heart, and avoid cliches. If it's heartfelt and real then it should evolve by itself, so don't worry about technicalities like tempo and structure until the end. Let the song come to life in your head, then once you've got some lyrics and a basic melody, anything that you're unsure of you could maybe get a musician friend to help you with. Hope that helps, and also that you'll have happier things to write songs about before long.